My hero's story starts with a man that meets a shadow girl and falls in love and becomes lovers in secret he brings her home with him to his village. Unknown to the villagers that hate monsters. Three days after she moved in she is pregnant with the man's kid when the kid is born it's a boy a human like shadow figure. They named him Shadow but ten years pass and a villager saw the man's lover and tells all the villagers. Two minutes pass and the man hears a angry mob coming to his home and he has no time to hide his lover. So he hides his boy under the floor and tells his boy not to come out until its safe. The boy was crying and tells him not to go but his dad did go. And when his dad can't be seen by the boy and then hears his mom screaming in pain. As his dad is fighting to save her but the villagers kill her they drag the man out of his home. The boy gets out of his hiding place and sees his mom is died on the floor. The boy ran to find his dad and he looks out the window to see his dad being burned alive and starts to cry. A villager heard him crying and tries to kill him the, boy runs from him. The boy struggles to live, to do so he becomes a thief. Ten more years pass and a old man sees Shadow passed out, he was going to leave Shadow there but he can see Shadow is in pain, so the old man brings Shadow to his home. Shadow wakes up and the old man offers food to him, not thrusting him Shadow looks at him and then eats, not keeping has eyes off him. The old man laughing at this, ask him where he came from, Shadow tells him I have not had a home for ten years.
The old man ask him why, Shadow tells him what happened to his family then the old man feels bad for Shadow. The old man offers him to stay at the his home. For the first time in years Shadow said thank you and in return Shadow helps the old man at his home. One day some thieves raid the old man's home and kill him and at the time Shadow is not there he is hunting for food. Shadow gets back and the home is broken into and runs to the old man's side crying. He sees a letter and it said Shadow I am so happy I meet you that one day and you are like the son. That I can never have all the days you are here have made me more happy than I have been in a long time. The first time I saw you, I saw you as a monster but seeing you were in pain I've taken a chance on you. I am happy I did you're more human than you look, I am happy to have you as a friend and when I die I would like people to see the good you can do that I see you. Shadow dropping to the floor crying and said to the dead old man I will be the hero you saw in me and he did. he became a lone hero that saves humans and monsters as the hero of the shadows. END OF PART 1
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ReplyDeleteGreat for the first part of this story. I really liked it, but as a critic I have to say there were a few grammar and speeding mistakes here and there, but I looked over them pretty easily. Although I have on complaint and that is its all in third person. I think it would have been better if you switched between perspectives
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